Monday, March 30, 2009

movie

1.they call the editor of the magazine and ask for the numbers, and the information of the people who were interviewed.
2.he is really upset and goes as far as to making glass take him to the places where the hackers convention took place and also giving all the numbers of the people interviewed and the web address of just micronics.
3.he acts like he is super apologetic about the situation and he shows that he is trying to be loyal to the magazine, however with going to school full time he is being put under a lot of stress and made a huge mistake
4.he says that all the information was taken from a source which isnt true, and claims that the reason everyone calling the people interviewed were getting answering machines and no call back was because those people are so upset over the article. When really Glass made the whole thing up
5.The stress he was put under and kinda the same thing about how people were calling and getting the machine and it was because they wern't happy about the printed article
6. everyone will go because they love him, and he writes such good stories normally, but then Lane found out that all of his stories were made up.

Thursday, March 19, 2009

perspective final

I know many of you have noticed, when you come out of school most days you will see a cop parked somewhere on the side of the road. As they just sit there with their radar guns out and waiting for that one speeding kid on his way home. Now I don’t hate all cops just the ones that spend all day looking for minor traffic violations. I realized how many cops did this when I went to court for my speeding ticket. There were so many people with traffic violations. As all of them went up, the city always removed the violation of the person’s record. But kept the fine for the violation, which gave me the feeling that the city just wants the money and they don’t care about the violation. I was going almost 20 over and I had no problem getting my ticket of my record. The city just wants the money and that’s why they send so many cops out, to just go and park on the side of the road and catch traffic violations.

Also anyone who has gotten in an accident and received a speeding ticket knows how long it takes for cops to arrive for an accident, over a ticket. When I got into my accident and had to call the cops for it. It took about an hour for one cop to show up. But when I got my speeding ticket, the time it took to receive the ticket couldn’t have been greater than ten minutes. And there were three cops around me by the end of the ordeal. Now I feel that this is an extremely significant difference in time between the two events, and it should be the other way around.

Also if you go around the school today and ask a bunch of Eastview High School students if they have received a ticket or at least been pulled over for a traffic violation. And the majority of them will say they have. Now I know a lot of High School kids speed but the amount that have gotten a ticket is way too high and just shows that there are way too many cops on the road if all they are going to do is look for traffic violations.

Wednesday, March 18, 2009

Peer Edit Brady Fish

1. Is there a clear point of view? (position)
No, he states every thing that is wrong but not a very clear piont of view.
2. Does the Op-Ed state the problem and solution simply?
Yes, does a great job of stating the problem.
3. Does the piece address the counter arguments?
Not really, he just needs to add something from the other side.
4. Is the Op-Ed interesting?
Yes, it is very interesting.
5. Are the paragraphs organized logically?
Yes, the article flows very well.
6. Does each paragraph develop an idea to support the thesis?
Yes, does a great job of that.
7. Is the writing clear?
Yes, story is very clear and flows really well.

Peer Edit Peter Bryan

1. Is there a clear point of view? (position)
The point of view, I am not sure of but the contraversy is over the fighting sioux.
2. Does the Op-Ed state the problem and solution simply?
i know the problem is the logo of ND, is about to change do to the fact that the indian tribes find it offensive. But im not sure what the solution is.
3. Does the piece address the counter arguments?
No, not really the story is based behind students of ND and nothing from the indian side.
4. Is the Op-Ed interesting?
Yes, the story is very interesting and very well written.
5. Are the paragraphs organized logically?
Yes, the story flows very well.
6. Does each paragraph develop an idea to support the thesis?
Each paragraph dovelopes an idea and does expand on the thesis.
7. Is the writing clear?
Yes, the story flows great.

Tuesday, March 17, 2009

perspective

I know many of you have noticed, when you come out of school most days you will see a cop parked somewhere on the side of the road. As they just sit there with their radar guns out and waiting for that one speeding kid on his way home. Now I don’t hate all cops just the ones that spend all day looking for minor traffic violations. I realized how many cops did this when I went to court for my speeding ticket. There were so many people with traffic violations. As all of them went up, the city always removed the violation of the person’s record. But kept the fine for the violation, which gave me the feeling that the city just wants the money and they don’t care about the violation. I was going almost 20 over and I had no problem getting my ticket of my record. The city just wants the money and that’s why they send so many cops out, to just go and park on the side of the road and catch traffic violations. Also anyone who has gotten in an accident and received a speeding ticket knows how long it takes for cops to arrive for an accident, over a ticket. When I got into my accident and had to call the cops for it. It took about an hour for one cop to show up. But when I got my speeding ticket, the time it took to receive the ticket couldn’t have been greater than ten minutes. And there were three cops around me by the end of the ordeal. Now I feel that this is an extremely significant difference in time between the two events, and it should be the other way around. Also if you go around the school today and ask a bunch of Eastview High School students if they have received a ticket or at least been pulled over for a traffic violation. And the majority of them will say they have. Now I know a lot of High School kids speed but the amount that have gotten a ticket is way too high and just shows that there are way too many cops on the road if all they are going to do is look for traffic violations.

Pre Writting Perspective with Brady Fish

1. That to many cops are sitting around trying to catch someone making a minor traffic violation. then actually protecting and serving the community.

2. I do believe that there are too many cops looking for speeders.

3. The reason why is that we feel more cops should be protecting me and not trying to give me a traffic violation.

4. 1. The amount of drug use has gone up, so more cops have been hired.
2. The percentage of people that have recieved a traffic violation in the past year.
3. The amount of time it takes for them to show up for an accident compared to a traffic violation.
4. That the city just wants their money for the ticket. They dont actually care about the violation.

5. To watch for cops and drive more carefull.

6. It will reduce the amount of traffric violations and get more cops to focus on drugs and other major offences.